Wednesday, July 6, 2011

WIND


Her mom was screaming and seeing things that weren't there. Her dad was distressed and the doctor came. She was very scared.

The next day supposed to sail; dad said go. On the boat hoisting the sails, tension was less. As the sails filled and the wind became a partner with the sailors, her tension eased away. The boat zigged and zagged on tacks across the bay and her only world was the boat and her friends.

On the breach and run toward home, the wind pushed them and the spinnaker filled. The wind whispered to her, "just be".


(For GBE2 100 word challenge)

27 comments:

  1. Gave me chills. Wonderful.

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  2. @resident gamer: Thanks, it's actually true.

    @Lorie: Wow, I really appreciate that since I have no real confidence in my writing skills.

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  3. Wow, this is wonderful! =D

    --Diana Jillian

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  4. This is powerful. I love the message and the way you wrote it!

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  5. You have said so much in such a few words - well done, I thought this was very powerful and emotional.

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  6. I love this! Thank you, I could feel the wind in my hair. Yum!

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  7. For a couple minutes I thought I smelled the salt in the air from the ocean. You painted a wonderful scene in my mind. C:

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  8. I like it!! Good job. :)

    ~Susan300
    http://www.haiku-corner.blogspot.com
    http://www.stay-calm-and-carry-on.blogspot.com

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  9. very relaxing. could feel the breeze in my hair and the salt on my skin

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  10. You were concerned about the quality of this??? It's wonderful!

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  11. Great! I especially like the end sentence. :)

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  12. That was lovely. It actually relaxed me as I read through it. I am learning to 'just be' so it was relevant to me. *hugs*

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  13. @everyone - thank you so much. I'm a hesitant writer and your comments gave me some confidence.
    Pam

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  14. Love your story!!

    Kathy
    http://www.thetruckerswife.com/

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  15. What a comforting story and your image went with it perfectly. Thank God for the beautiful things in life that can make us feel "okay."

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  16. Would love a peaceful moment sailing so I could feel the essence of "just be."

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  17. Very well written...I really thought this was great--and I can hear the whispering wind. Cheers, Jenn

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  18. A glimpse--and I felt it. Good work.

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  19. Still wonderful, the second time around. :O)

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  20. Very well written! Really makes the point. Glad you reposted.

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  21. takes in a slow deep breath... lets it out... and smiles

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  22. I love the end 'just be'. Beautiful.

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  23. Very affecting story, Pam, and very well told; you said a lot in just 100 words. And the photo is beautiful.

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