Her mom was screaming and seeing things that weren't there. Her dad was distressed and the doctor came. She was very scared.
The next day supposed to sail; dad said go. On the boat hoisting the sails, tension was less. As the sails filled and the wind became a partner with the sailors, her tension eased away. The boat zigged and zagged on tacks across the bay and her only world was the boat and her friends.
On the breach and run toward home, the wind pushed them and the spinnaker filled. The wind whispered to her, "just be".
(For GBE2 100 word challenge)
What a great little story!
ReplyDeleteGave me chills. Wonderful.
ReplyDelete@resident gamer: Thanks, it's actually true.
ReplyDelete@Lorie: Wow, I really appreciate that since I have no real confidence in my writing skills.
Wow, this is wonderful! =D
ReplyDelete--Diana Jillian
This is powerful. I love the message and the way you wrote it!
ReplyDeleteYES. this speaks volumes! !!
ReplyDeleteYou have said so much in such a few words - well done, I thought this was very powerful and emotional.
ReplyDeleteI love this! Thank you, I could feel the wind in my hair. Yum!
ReplyDeleteJust be sounds great to me!
ReplyDeleteFor a couple minutes I thought I smelled the salt in the air from the ocean. You painted a wonderful scene in my mind. C:
ReplyDeleteI like it!! Good job. :)
ReplyDelete~Susan300
http://www.haiku-corner.blogspot.com
http://www.stay-calm-and-carry-on.blogspot.com
very relaxing. could feel the breeze in my hair and the salt on my skin
ReplyDeleteYou were concerned about the quality of this??? It's wonderful!
ReplyDeleteGreat! I especially like the end sentence. :)
ReplyDeleteThat was lovely. It actually relaxed me as I read through it. I am learning to 'just be' so it was relevant to me. *hugs*
ReplyDelete@everyone - thank you so much. I'm a hesitant writer and your comments gave me some confidence.
ReplyDeletePam
Love your story!!
ReplyDeleteKathy
http://www.thetruckerswife.com/
What a comforting story and your image went with it perfectly. Thank God for the beautiful things in life that can make us feel "okay."
ReplyDeleteWould love a peaceful moment sailing so I could feel the essence of "just be."
ReplyDeleteVery well written...I really thought this was great--and I can hear the whispering wind. Cheers, Jenn
ReplyDeleteA glimpse--and I felt it. Good work.
ReplyDeleteStill wonderful, the second time around. :O)
ReplyDeleteVery well written! Really makes the point. Glad you reposted.
ReplyDeletetakes in a slow deep breath... lets it out... and smiles
ReplyDeleteI want to sail away!
ReplyDeleteI love the end 'just be'. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteVery affecting story, Pam, and very well told; you said a lot in just 100 words. And the photo is beautiful.
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